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As i am  dreaming of you i began to see
finally spring came after winter
all the frozen roses can bloom with love
tears falling from my eye will be dry with happiness
which brought me a sunshine that brightened my eye

I used to imagine when I hold your hand
and take a long walk where we can find a place to love
under the blue sky with sunshine
where i can see your eye and feel the angels are real

I wish i was a singer who can sing a love song for you
but i was afraid that my song willnt reach to you
will be faded in the darkness where i came from
I want to fell the warmth and give my love to you

Dreams are dream i suddenly woke up in a nightmare
I fell like i was a cracked glass thrown from a height
making a loud and scary sound where noone can hear
My loneliness has become my company

i feel like i am in a jungle alone in the darkness
where my shadow left me alone in the wood
I gave my soul and truth and yet
you broke and made fun of it

Words can never explain how much i loved you
but i hope you will realize someday that i loved you
I dont want to suffer more pain
lets the rain wash all the pain and suffer and bring sunshine

i steeped another milestone now
hope you will be happy as i am happy for you
we will dream with our open eyes all we need is hope and faith

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I think this deserves a Professional analysis and critique so i put the effort into. Your welcome :D Normally id only do this if u paid me or for schewlll so yeah #privileged. 

Truly stellar depiction of the stages of a relationship. From the heaven-like bliss feeling at the start to the cold dark loneliness and pain after parting ways, and the strength needed to move on and keep growing as a person. 

Also your transitions were great! It was very unexpected and very vivid throughout. but played out as smooth as a movie. 

But above all what i think makes this poem so impacting and resplendent is not only how personal and relatable this sounds, but also how well you captivated the lesson of overcoming these hardships and your perspective on love. 

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11 hours ago, anonnep said:

As i am  dreaming of you i began to see
finally spring came after winter
all the frozen roses can bloom with love
tears falling from my eye will be dry with happiness
which brought me a sunshine that brightened my eye

I used to imagine when I hold your hand
and take a long walk where we can find a place to love
under the blue sky with sunshine
where i can see your eye and feel the angels are real

I wish i was a singer who can sing a love song for you
but i was afraid that my song willnt reach to you
will be faded in the darkness where i came from
I want to fell the warmth and give my love to you

Dreams are dream i suddenly woke up in a nightmare
I fell like i was a cracked glass thrown from a height
making a loud and scary sound where noone can hear
My loneliness has become my company

i feel like i am in a jungle alone in the darkness
where my shadow left me alone in the wood
I gave my soul and truth and yet
you broke and made fun of it

Words can never explain how much i loved you
but i hope you will realize someday that i loved you
I dont want to suffer more pain
lets the rain wash all the pain and suffer and bring sunshine

i steeped another milestone now
hope you will be happy as i am happy for you
we will dream with our open eyes all we need is hope and faith

what a beautiful poem @anonnep before i dont want to read poems and now i see your poem lol i am now interested! :x

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2 minutes ago, ieatkdubsass said:

I wish to one day become hokage of the leaf village.

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what is that stripes in his chicks? is he a cat or he had scratches in his face? naturo is a cat now ? :o 

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On 4/3/2018 at 12:47 AM, KinAniK said:

I Wish Dream Come True :)

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:48 AM, SuddenlyBroke said:

wow you are a real poet annonep beautiful poem!

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:48 AM, pcservis said:

nice poem bro i nearlly cried

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:51 AM, nadiya14 said:

very beautiful!!  bravo anonnep

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:53 AM, arteemosh said:

great one Annon :)

 

On 4/3/2018 at 1:15 AM, truemeng said:

 

been there. done that.

now im finally happy. ❤

 

good job @anonnep. make more! 😉

 

On 4/3/2018 at 3:04 AM, christy said:

awww anon that was beautiful <3

 

 

On 4/3/2018 at 3:26 AM, Etude said:

Anon! Beautiful poem! 😭

 

On 4/3/2018 at 10:11 AM, madcoin said:

Anonn... u drunk?? lol nice poem

 

On 4/3/2018 at 10:38 AM, clariaaaa said:

beautiful poem by Anonnep . Happy go lucky

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:17 PM, 77kdub said:

very beautiful anonnep

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:32 PM, bmg said:

Wow anonnep that was beautiful . You have got a real gift in writing. I hope to read more from you soon 

 

On 4/3/2018 at 1:27 PM, KinAniK said:

So, heart touching poem man :) @anonnep

 

On 4/3/2018 at 10:12 PM, rockingmonk said:

So beautiful it is anonep... :))) thanks for sharing!! Will be waiting for your next one.. :)) 

 

Thanks  you guys  

On 4/3/2018 at 10:30 PM, lisizpepla said:

ea0e6be15a6354948ff338c7c96e1ccf.jpgit's sincere Annonep. 

broken love?

broken love?

da barat 
no ya khorosho

On 4/3/2018 at 12:54 AM, Katarina said:

This is beautiful, @anonnep ! I like it a lot! ♥ I hope the real pain was NOT the inspiration for this poem. :) 

 

Keep on writing! You are doing a lovely job with it. ^_^ 

 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:55 AM, veleten said:

girls,do not let a poet die

give your neverending love to anonnep

p.s. the pain is real,true art as well as  true feelings

has its price

life  is  like  a  open library where  there are  many inspiration 

On 4/3/2018 at 12:19 PM, Bigmann23 said:

Very nice anonneps did you write it yourself?

 

yep i wrote  

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